I’m far up in the air

Still I see you from down below

You gesture for me to go down

But the wind says there’s other places to go

I’m high up

I drift here and there

But there’s no company in the sky

I’ve been everywhere and nowhere

You are down on the ground

Connected to your roots

You’re stuck to the earth

Yet you enjoy its fruits

I wish I could visit

But nature has its limits

You make me want to descend

But in a different direction blows the wind

  • gaifux@lemmy.worldEnglish
    4·
    5 months ago

    I like this one better than poem 2 personally. It’s another take on what I see as a similar tension, between being grounded and in the air / aloof. The line about fruits, like the idea but I think you could potentially flesh it out more. What draws the “you” in the poem to the ground and fruits? It seems like a preference that isn’t touched on, maybe that’s the intention but seems like describing their preference could help further color the subject’s tension / struggle

    • Striker@lemmy.worldOPEnglish
      21·
      5 months ago

      To give you the gist it’s basically about inability to form connections. Like it’s not meant to aloof more like that I make shallow connections with people. Like in my class I’ve talked and somewhat know everyone in my class “Been everywhere and nowhere” yet I haven’t made a significant friendship with any of them. I briefly blow into people’s lives and then fade back out without being grounded to them. I stuck far up. The wind here is like this vague force that I seemingly have no control over like a mysterious force that prevents me from making connections. I hope this helps you understand this better.